Narnia France

yay my story!!! comment plz and help me think of a title!!! ooh and sorry if i spell anything wrong!

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The sky was so pretty. A bright, deep blue. And the stream, so many colors within. My beautiful chestnut horse was drinking from it, so i was free to wander.

Why does the Narnian sky look so different than that of my home? 'It's not my home any more,' I reminded myself.

These feilds...so open and beautiful. Everything here is much more than where I left. More colorful, more peaceful, more everything.

I heard footsteps behind me and drew my sword. It was forbidden in Morona for women to carry weapons, but I stole this from my father. It had a black hilt embelished with sapphiers. My father never used, so I thought it would do better with me.

When I turned, I saw a boy standing next to a white unicorn. He was dressed lavishly, complete with a cape. A golden crown rested atop his soft blond hair. Our eyes locked, and I felt my face grow red.

'Who are you?' he asked. His voice was sweet, but strong.

I stood tall. 'I come from a land called Morona.'
'Where is that?' He looked only a year or two older than me.

'To the north.'

'Why have I never heard of it before?'

'We keep to ourselves,' I paused. 'And we looked down upon Narnia.'

At that he drew his sword. 'What are you doing here?'

'I escaped. I disagree with the laws and morals of the country. And I could never rule it.'

'So you are a princess?' He lowered his sword.

'My father is Lord of South Morona. I am his only child and heiriss to the throne. Therein lies the problem, for it is illeagal in Morona for a woman to rule. My mother refused to have another child, so my father had her locked up. I spoke with her and she said she would not fight him any more. Meanwhile, my father found a new bride who is two months along with his child!' I was shocked at how much I had told this complete stranger. But it felt good to tell someone. 'I must stay strong on the outside, no matter how delicate I may be on the inside,' I thought.

'Wow...women...your parents...um...wow. Would you like to come back to the castle at Cair Paravail with me? We can get you some food and rest.'

All I had eaten on my two week journey was some stolen scraps of meat and berries I found along the way. And I had slept on the ground the whole time. Real food and a soft bed sounded good to me.

'I am not sure if I can trust you,' I finally said. I wanted to stay strong. Was that strong? I felt confused looking into his deep, blue-gray eyes, the color of the sky preparing to storm.
Suddenly, I began to feel light-headed and weak.

'Maybe I should just lay down...' I thought. Then I collapsed onto the ground.

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dun dun dun!! so what do you think? it was a lot longer in my notebook...3 1/2 pages Edité par hopelessromantic le 01/06/2006 à 22:39
Edité par hopelessromantic le 04/06/2006 à 03:35

OMG!!!! tht was excellent hun!

Uh-Oh!! noo she cant die!
PETER TO THE RESCUE!

update soon

thanx!!! i will update soon!! and everyone else- COMMENT PLEASE!!!

gr8 story!!! love ya chica!!!

that is incredible HR i love it girlie! plz update soon! i'm geting very interested in it!

true dat!!

i will update it as soon as i finish writing the next part lol

yeay!!!!!

that is a very good story!!
keep us posted!

that is a very good story!!
keep us posted!

that is a very good story!!
keep us posted!

ashlee got a little posting happy, dont ya think?


jk! yeah HR you have to keep us updated! i'm dying to read more!

okays, updating, hurahhh!!!!

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When I woke I was on the back of a unicorn. My head was on the boy's shoulder and my arms were around his waist. 'Mmmm...this is nice.' I shocked myself wigh the thought.

In my dazed confusion I saw a grand castle looming ahead. We rode up, the boy said something to the servants who took away the unicorn after the boy lifted me and carried me inside. Though I could not make outh the words, what he said to the people within the castle as we clamored up the stairs had one distinct emotion: worry. Worry for me, my well-being. I was touched at the fact that, only knowing me (the concious me) for a few minutes, he could feel that much.

He had reached his destination: two doors, each decorated with a golden lion's head. I knew this to be Aslan, of whom my friends had joked for many hours. Behind the doors was a beautifuly furnished room. To the right was a large four-poster bed, draped in red and gold silk curtains. Across the room was a window that took up most of the wall. From it, a deep blue ocean could be seen, as well as lush, grassy hills.

I was laid down on the bed while the boy rushed through another door. I became less concious, in the state expirienced when just awakening.

The boy came back in carying a glass of water and a smaller cup filled with a purple liquid.

'Are you ok?' he asked when he noticed I was awake.

'I think so,' I said faintly. 'I don't know why I feel...'

'I think it's a lack of the right food. You've hardly eaten anything on your journey; am I right?'

I only nodded, for I felt too weak to speak. Behind him I could see that the sun was begining to set.

'Here.' He climbed into the bed and helped me sit up so I could drink the purple liquid. It was disgusting. I chased it down with the entire glass of water.

I laid back down, this time beneath the sheets. They were so soft and smooth, I felt like I could stay here forever. The boy stayed right with me, his hand there on my left arm.

'I will stay here, just to make sure you're ok. Is that fine?'

I nodded, closed my eyes, and drifted off into fever-induced sleep.

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so what do you think?

OMG!!! HR U ROCK!!

'tht boy' *coughs Peter coughs* is sooo nice and caring!!

aww how sweet

update soon.;...or ill idk cry maybe?...j/k

^^ same here! UPDATE! PLZ

omg i love it!!PIC-i follow you 'that boy' *coughs rapidly*Peter*coughs rapidly* lol

awsome girlie!!! there are so many talented people on this site!!!!!! you are definatly one of them!!!

i feel so loved and there is no smiley to represent my emotion lol i will update tomorrow k?

will4ever you have to update soon too!! i really want to read more!!

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The first thing I noticed when I woke was that I was no longer feverish. The second was that I was lying with the boy right next to me.

'When he said he'd stay here I didn't think he ment all night.' That's when I realized I didnt even know his name. 'How strange...we've slept together and you don't even know who I am.'

How peaceful he looked while sleeping. I almost wanted to reach out and stroke his hair.

He stirred and pulled me closer to him. I could feel his muscular arms and the curves of his chest. 'Now I really could stay here forever.'

This post-fever mind was working very slowly, for I now noticed something I should've around the time I realized our faces were a mere three inches apart: In my sleep, I had thrown all of the sheets off (I always was a restless sleeper) and my green dress had come almost all the way up, exposing as much of my legs as it could without doing the same to my backside.

'This is not good at all.' He had been so sweet and caring for me last night, truly more loving than anyone in my life had ever been. Such a gentleman he was, and it would be so akward for him to wake now and see me in this state. Also, this would not look good to anyone else in the castle who happened to come in.

I couldn't move my leg, for it was tangled around his. The sheets were too far down at the bottom of the bed to be reached, unless I moved my entire body. But that would wake him up and defeat the entire purpose.

What if...what if I pretended to be asleep? After all, I only faced this perdicament because I was first to wake. If he thought he was awake with me lying there sleeping, he would have to figure this all out.

But my restless mind continued on after I closed my eyes. What if he had woken before me and was doing the same as I? What if we lay here like this all day waiting for the other to wake?

As he stirred, my eyes flashed open, but this time he did not remain in dreamland.

Seeing of course me first, he stared with a strong yet dreamy gaze. It took him a moment to realize he was holding me tight, and he immediatly let go, blushing crimson

'I'm so sor-I didn't mean-you were-and I-' He couldn't get his thoughts straight.

And neither could I. 'It's o- we were-how sweet-sleeping-' I stopped, for it was no use. How could I tell him no one had ever even wanted to treat me as sweet as he had? How could I say that I had never slept more peaceful than as I had in his arms? Or that no one had ever held me so close, so protectivly, so lovingly as he had?

'I'll...um...I'm going to..I'll just leave.' And he left.

And for once in my life, I was alone but not lonely.

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ok...comment time!

which one??
yeah i should though..

WoW....i wish i was her...i wouldnt mind th at all...

Peter jst had to leave...lol

UPDATE SOON!!!

i cant wait to rd more!!